story-by-Cory

Write something happening in the first couple of lines in third person– something exciting is going to happening (elves getting up and disappearing, dancing) it does not have to be extreme, but it must get the story off with a hiss and a roar! Start in the middle of the story, ask the question, could I start further on in the story? Write long enough so that people want to read on, your main goal is to entice the reader to find out more. <<>> they left earth like a flash of lightning (the speed) it was frightning we were in space in a matter of seconds they heard a language they could not understand, he saw bright, shiney, glittery things she saw the New Zealand flag lieing on the planet of mars. Mike pulled a lever it was like a push and a shuve that second the seatbelts were released they wre floating it was amazing.

<<>> 1. they left earth with a flash, the speed was frightning "LOOK JUPITER, MARS" he saiz I think Im dreaming!!!! He Hears a language he's never heard before, a spider he saiz NO an alien she saiz, "The New Zealand Flag". They pulled a lever that gave a shuve the seatbelts were released and the action began. He needed to go to the toilet but he didint know what to do "How do i go to the toilet -he said