Space+by+Esther

Close your eyes and imagine yourself on another planet or travelling through space (e.g. in a spaceship.) Write three things that you: See: The Moon, little ailen men crowding aroung the rocket, crumbly rocks and sand Hear: Strange little peeping noises and grunting that I couldn't understand, the rockets engine, Smell: Sweat, sand Write something happening in the first couple of lines in third person– something exciting is going to happening (elves getting up and disappearing, dancing) it does not have to be extreme, but it must get the story off with a hiss and a roar! Start in the middle of the story, ask the question, could I start further on in the story? Write long enough so that people want to read on, your main goal is to entice the reader to find out more.

Jerry glanced down at the fuel gage. The Rocket was rapitly running out of fuel. They had to make crash landing, but where? There was no land or rock anywhere to land on. AND NEXT Jerry looked at the fuel gage again. It read EMPTY and the familar crimsom glow was present. You could sense the tension swirling around in the rocket. AND NEXT The air was running out and the suspence turned to fear and terror and all you could hear was the screams,wails,howls and the crys for family. That was the most heart-wrenching moment of my young life. Suddenly, there was lots of banging and crashing! We had landed, but where? AND NEXT The terror changed to confusion. Indianna checked the radar. It was on is last legs but it was still working. It stated that the closest planet was indeed Mars and it was 35,000 light years away. And the planet we had landed on didn't even exist. It hadn't been discovered yet.We had just found the lost planet.

As the crew staggered out of the ship,we all wondered where we were when BLEEBLE LEEBLE was blurted out from somewhere. Bob yelled,Watch out Jerry behind you! I jumped as far as I could and when I looked up I was astonished by what was standing before me. AND NEXT A strange little creauture was there. "BLEEBLE Welcome LEEBLE Earthlings!!!" AAAAAAAHHHHHHH! ''What are you?!!!" Just as the little one was about to speak a great rumbling noise was heard all around this loney place. AND NEXT A massive castle raised out of the green sand AND NEXT The strange little creature grabbed me by the hand and pulled me inside AND NEXT Dougie.Indianna,Bob and Lauren were left out in the cold as i was dragged into this strange new place. AND NEXT I was saluted as the "chosen one" AND NEXT Servants brought me stuff that was fit for a king AND NEXT

19/11/08

Jerry glanced down at the fuel gage. The Rocket was rapitly running out of fuel. They had to make crash landing, but where? There was no land or rock anywhere to land on. Jerry looked at the fuel gage again. It read EMPTY and the familar crimsom glow was present. You could sense the tension swirling around in the rocket. The air was running out and the suspence turned to fear and terror and all you could hear was the screams,wails,howls and the crys for family. That was the most heart-wrenching moment of my young life. Suddenly, there was lots of banging and crashing! We had landed, but where?

The terror changed to confusion. Indianna checked the radar. It was on is last legs but it was still working. It stated that the closest planet was indeed Mars and it was 35,000 light years away. And the planet we had landed on didn't even exist. It hadn't been discovered yet.We had just found the lost planet. As the crew staggered out of the ship,we all wondered where we were when BLEEBLE LEEBLE was blurted out from somewhere. Bob yelled,Watch out Jerry behind you! I jumped as far as I could and fell on to some weird lime green sand! When I looked up I was astonished by what was standing over me. A strange little creauture was there. "BLEEBLE Welcome LEEBLE Earthlings!!!" AAAAAAAHHHHHHH! ''What are you?!!!" Just as the little one was about to speak a great rumbling noise was heard all around this loney place. A massive castle raised out of the green sand. The strange little creature grabbed me by the hand and pulled me inside Dougie.Indianna,Bob and Lauren were left out in the cold as I was dragged into this strange new place. "Where am I ? "Why you're in the great city of Squbble Lee!

First Story Terry glanced down at the fuel gage. The Rocket was rapitly running out of fuel. They had to make crash landing but where? There was no land or rock anywhere to land on. Jerry looked at the fuel gage again. It read EMPTY and the familar crimsom glow was present.

Head: What they are thinking Hands: Doing something with their hands Heart; How they react

e your story underneath the first attempt (Use the rule off line in tools) and rewrite the same story with your character thinking or feeling something. “Oh no,” he thought. She was curious This is the end A shiver ran up his spine (don’t always need to tell the reader that they are scared). Remember that it’s important to have your character involved in action. ***Now is the time to write w** **hat is going to happen next? Copy and paste your beginning, leave a line and write "And then...". Look at the example below to see how to do it.**

Once upon a time there were three little pigs etc. And then...they were told to find somewhere else to live by their mum. And then...they went to the market, the first little pig bought some straw etc. And then... the first little pig made his house out of straw, the second little pig made his house out of sticks etc. And then a wolf came along a asked to be let in, the first little pig refused entry and the wolf blew his house in. And then the wolf went to the second little pigs house etc.


 * What is going to happen next?

And then…

Is this exciting? Is something more exciting happening? How is the story going to develop – all we have to do is ask “and then…” Focus on the main point of what is going to happen – write the main points so that you have an idea of where your story is going, don’t write in the dialogue etc.**

Hopefully you get the point! The most important thing is to make sure you write the main things that happen (leave all the flowery details out), what I don't want to see is - He fell down. And next...he got up. And next...he picked a flower. Think of a DVD and how it is split into scenes.


 * Next task is to decide what has happened to your character in order to change something, e.g. a characters thoughts and feelings can change. The characters have to change so the reader wants to get interested. Characters have lots of problems and things going on, e.g. brothers and sister relationships, school, mum and dad…The difference does not have to be great, even a subtle change is good.

What did your character think before?

What do they think afterwards?

Write a few points – what is going to be the major change to their thoughts, attitudes and feelings.

What sort of person was your character at the start of the story?

What sort of person is your character at the finish of the story?

What are the advantages of having you in the story? One is pretending writing about somebody- the writer is god. The character is a person who develops as**